I've written this poem, but I need an honest critique. It starts at dusk, most every night When stars come out and moon is bright I feel my skin grow thin and tight And in my bones I sense great might. It hurts a bit, but very brief Great happiness replaces grief As my fur breaks my feeble skin And out I come with placid grin. Upon the ground I place my paws As I admire my sharp claws And such great force I feel in my jaws My teeth as strong and sharp as saws. My ears the silent woods can cleave The tiniest sounds I can perceive My eyes are keen and very sharp They cut into the deepest dark. My fur is brown and cream below My tail tip black as soaring crow By twilight night, it seems to glow In the soft gleam of moonlit snow. And how I run and leap and bound! I sprint with speed and cover ground And chase my prey to gobble meat And howl with joy from high rock seat. In cool, clean stream I wash my fur I cleanse my coat of dirt and bur And groom it neat to look real nice And clean my teeth by chewing ice. When tired, I curl up in my den Asleep to the sound of chirping wren Warm and cosy, alone and free No shadow of sorrow, only glee. At home in land of rock and tree I'm happy, joyful, calm and free A lone young wolf so full of life So far from human stress and strife. It is quite like a second birth Into a body of greater girth I wish to live here every day Where wood is green and sky is grey. This is the way that it should be A lone wolf in the woods, you see This is the wish most dear to me A tranquil life at peace and free.
I didn't get past the first stanza. "In my bones I sense great might"? In my reading of your poem I sense a great stretch to rhyme.