Comics are about storytelling, conveying a narrative through images, so my advice would be to work on that with the figural relationships and backgrounds being used in the service of the story.

This page 1 works okay as it is, but consider how the composition of the page and the panels directs the reading order.

In every panel, the character is facing to the left, whereas the reading order goes to the right. I would try reversing the angle of the scene in the final panel so she is walking off to the right, as a cue to go to the next page.

If you haven't read Scott McCloud's books on Understanding, Reinventing* and Making Comics, then I'd suggest starting there.

*Ignore the chapter on the Internet and web comics, as its obviously been outdated very quickly.