>>17069

*shrug* They ain't all gonna be winners.

Joe don't sweat the small stuff. I realized what the card/cars typo was and let it slide. Still though, your version is still better than Naylor's is.

>>17059
>Ended up in New Jersey
AND SHE SURVIVED!?

>>17277
I thought I smelled something!

Time to get back into the swing of these. This is not my favourite, but the page doesn't give me much to work with.

This one on the other hand I like. It's a much nerdier joke, I think, and Abigail sounds a little more natural.

>>17299
Oops, sorry, that should have gone in the Index thread, mah bad, I'll move it.

>>17302
I have to ask. What are you quoting, Dante?

>>17302

yeah i have no idea what that's from, i caught the word lego, that's it and that might be totally unrelated to the quote.

"If you can read this yer an arrogant genius"?

>>17314

If my translator's to be believed, you're close.

And now that it's out, here's #114 (7/2). I did some minor art edits--one of the problems with Thomas' run is that his legs aren't bending. People don't RUN like that. Also changed the phone gag to something that's not puerile.

The edits aren't perfect, as I'm not an artist by trade. Still I like it.

it's a hell of a lot better than the original, i don't hate thomas (as much) with this one. and the dialog matches the panel a lot better as well.

No ALLO edit for #115; there's nothing to be done with it.

I'm also running into a charming wall that I completely expected and still hate: I really wanted this to be a fun, pleasant week (or whatever) with Trixie. Instead, it's a cliche Calvin & Hobbes arc, and I'm forced to play along.

Grates my nerves, but I knew the job was dangerous when I took it (cluck cluck cluck cluck).

#116. I didn't want to do it, but you know this is how it's going to go down--Trixie's gonna lose.

personally i'd hold off on the edits until we know how this whole thing unfolds, it makes it a little hard trying to make up the dialog and plot without knowing what naylor is going to do for the next page.

>>17453

You say that like he has plots

i never claimed they were good plots

>>17457
again, you say this as if there was much of a plot other than "Objectivism: the webcomic"

Naylor has plots?

Honestly, I never saw any real racism or antisemitism back in Better Days. I figured it was all just plot. Maybe I just don't know Mr. Naylor very well, heh. It was fun to read and I felt like I grew up with Fisk and Lucy in a way.

...But seeing these rewrites, yeah, I can kind of see where these claims of crappy writing can come from. I mean I can REALLY see them.

>>17854
Anytime you go out of your way to make your black characters (I.E. the hyenas) come of as sounding less intelligent than your other racial caricatures, then you're at best being racially insensitive. Each animal type he picked to represent different human races themselves carry anthropomorphized secondary characteristics/stereotypes and to select the hyena out of all the possible animals from "Africa" to represent blacks was either intentionally done (because Jay has self-proclaimed every action he does is well thought out and not by chance), or, he just can't draw any other animal types from Africa to use for black people in his comic world. I'll give him the benefit of the doubt and assume its the latter.

>>17854 I was the same way, my first read through the worst reaction i ever had was 'what?'. Namely this was at the end of the father's footsteps chapter, and it wasn't even about how fisk was now a terrorist, i wasn't really paying attention to that part, it was more of why bother setting fisk and beth up to become a couple only to cancel it in the next chapter. Now I don't know how i ever let some of the other stuff slide, i guess it was my usually generous nature to just let stuff go.

>>17854
>>17865
Jay does not like black people; if you have any doubts about that, sift through his LiveJournal and see if you can find any posts where he's related his opinions about them in the past, assuming he hasn't deleted them by now. He wrote some particularly disgusting things around the time that Hurricane Katrina hit New Orleans that made me stop following him entirely.

to get this thread back on topic, joe are you holding off on any more rewrites to see where this all goes?

>>18061

Yes.

I may rewrite Trish's Penis, too; it's crying for it.

with the hand you're given for that stupid pornfolio, There's still not much i think anyone can do for it other than removing 'caramel babies' and 'you can't find this at best buy'

Another wave of edits.

First, some Origina Life edits. #117.

#119. #118 was fine as-is.

#120.

#121. This brings us current.

And now Trish's Member. (I am not suing the official title.) I bent this one around a little; there's also some art edits, but again, I'm not an artist so some of them are a bit clunky. Most of them are "ambient" changes, like removing the big "AAAAH" behind Goat when he blows in Trish's mouth.

Again: please don't point out art failings or typos.

And it went slightly out of order. Sorry about that.

One thing: I wanted to change Trish's face on Page #5, when she's commenting on Erzile's dick; I couldn't pull it off, so I didn't bother.

It's still kind of freaky Joe, but your re-write makes it better.

well like i said, there's only so much you can do when the very story is a lost cause, but it's at least stupid, if you could have shooped her face a few times the dialog and art would match up perfectly, maybe we can get some of the resident shoopers to help next time. I do love how trish's lines on the last page, it's like exacally what most of us thought when we saw this.

You mean besides the whole "Sparkling Vampires" bullshit? I have a female friend, the same one that made my avatar on my DA page, that recieved the whole series as a gift. She tried to read the first book, and just barely got through the introduction, when she read the BS about the "vampires" sparkling in the sunlight she called Bullshit and stopped reading. (For her credit she didn't throw the books away, she donated them to the library in town.)

you people ore on crack

Ore on crack?