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No. 16795
ID: 48a908
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Some strips I just can't improve for various reasons, like #103--the art says something, and all I could possibly do is rephrase what Liz is saying. Rewriting Better Days is largely out of the question, as it's over 600 pages and usually better than Original Life.
>>ok i'll give a bit of honest critisizm. Most of your rewrites i prefered to the originals, but there were some where i felt jay's were better, not everything he does is broken (at least in terms of dialog). The whole cooties story probably didn't need to be touched, but i really liked you putting reason behind why abigal was a nurse.
I thought--and this is personal opinion--that the idea "cooties" was just kind of dumb, even for a kid like Thomas, and the term got thrown around as something amazingly dangerous to a ludicrous degree. Reworking it like something from a bad action show felt less clumsy, but that's me. I liked reworking Fang, too, who's supposed to sound Creole (yes, in Georgia, gimme some rome here) to make him a bit more sympathetic.
Opinions are going to vary on what should and shouldn't be edited, and I have no expectations of pleasing everyone. :D I'll happily admit that some of his work is at the very least acceptable. I don't intend to always do every page going forward, either.
And yeah, rationalizing the nurse's get-up was fun.
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